The bar chart below gives information about the number of students studying Computer Science at a UK university between 2010 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below gives information about the number of students studying Computer Science at a UK university between 2010 and 2012.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
the given bar charts data
invole
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involve
the number of students learning computer science
of
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united
king dom
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kingdom
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from 2010 to 2012.
Overall
,
on
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2012,2011 and 2012,
bristish
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British
home students
increaes
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increases
increase
increased
from 43 to 45 by boy people,
However
,
the
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oversea student
are
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elite between 2010 and 2012 from 31 to 45
by
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girl
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.
According to
the data,
on
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2010
genteman
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gentleman
gentlemen
of
bristish
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British
home
student
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students
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there was
grow
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up
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40 people,
however
,
on
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2011,there
was
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decreased
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dramatically
around
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by around
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24 people.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrolment numbers
  • fluctuations
  • trend
  • depicts
  • analyze
  • peak
  • significant
  • comparison
  • subject matter
  • highlight
  • notable
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