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The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different ages in the UK who used the Internet every day from 2003-2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different ages in the UK who used the Internet every day from 2003-2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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debit
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diferent
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different
 ages in the United
kingdom
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 about people who is there used the
internet
 from 2003 to 2006 .
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graph
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for age
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age
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ages
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 from 16 to 24 there per cent trend
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with had
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had
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increase
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increased
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to
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in
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uesed
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use
internet
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According to
 what is shown ,
they
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the
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 people age group 65 and plus . they did not have a reason for
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using
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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.
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 the
internet
it
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apply
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is not
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important
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important
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their
thier
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their needs
uesed
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used
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apply
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all
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all,
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 they did not
used
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use
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 the
internet
comparison
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compared
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 the teenagers around 15 to 24 years old . the
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used
internet
 for 2003 had
decrease
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decreased
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words internet with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • age group
  • daily internet use
  • trend
  • increase/decrease
  • upward/downward trend
  • year-wise
  • distribution
  • fluctuation
  • highest/lowest
  • technological advancements
  • social changes
  • targeted marketing
  • internet usage patterns
  • technological familiarity
  • lifestyle
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