In the future, people may no longer be able to pay things in shops using cash. All payments may have to be made by card or using phone. Do you think this will happen one day? Why do you think some people might not be happy to give up using cash?
Some
expert
once stated that in the Fix the agreement mistake
experts
future
Use synonyms
cash
will not be used Use synonyms
for
pay things, all Fix the infinitive
to for
payment
transactions Use synonyms
would
require Wrong verb form
will
phone
or card. Correct article usage
a phone
This
essay will discuss the possibility of Linking Words
this
hypothesis Linking Words
will happen
in the Wrong verb form
happening
future
and how will Use synonyms
human
react Correct word choice
apply
into
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to
this
.
With all the merchants and shops Linking Words
require
Wrong verb form
requiring
cashless
Use synonyms
payment
through QR, bank transfer, or swiping card, Use synonyms
cash
Use synonyms
money
has become more vulnerable to find. Not only Use synonyms
cashless
is convenient compared to Use synonyms
cash
Use synonyms
payment
, Use synonyms
Use synonyms
cashless
Correct word choice
but cashless
transaction
would prevent people Fix the agreement mistake
transactions
to bring
a Change preposition
from bringing
lot
amount of Correct your spelling
large
money
inside their Use synonyms
wallet
, Fix the agreement mistake
wallets
thus
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ensure
their safety from thievery. The merchants Wrong verb form
ensuring
also
find Linking Words
cashless
Use synonyms
payment
more favourable. All transactions made by bank or card would automatically create the digital history on their merchant's account. Use synonyms
Therefore
, the cost and budget analysis for their shops would be more practical and Linking Words
fast
. With Replace the word
faster
this
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much
conveniences, it is safe to assume that in the Correct quantifier usage
many
not so distant
Add a hyphen
not-so-distant
future
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cash
Use synonyms
Use synonyms
payment
Fix the agreement mistake
payments
would
not be accepted anymore.
Considering the Wrong verb form
will
benefit
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benefits
of
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apply
cashless
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bring
to either the buyers or the sellers, people will feel Change the verb form
brings
cashless
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payment
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more
gratifying than Add a missing verb
is more
Use synonyms
cash
Correct article usage
the cash
payment
method. Use synonyms
In addition
to its practical value, doing Linking Words
cashless
Use synonyms
transaction
would be Fix the agreement mistake
transactions
more safe
and people will feel more enjoyable when Replace the words
safer
traveling
far away without bringing a hefty number Change the spelling
travelling
money
.
In conclusion, Use synonyms
Use synonyms
cashless
Add an article
the cashless
payment
method will likely replace the Use synonyms
cash
Use synonyms
payment
method in the Use synonyms
future
. Not only it is convenient for the consumers, but it is prone for the shops to do their financial performance. To add up, Use synonyms
cash
Use synonyms
money
that Use synonyms
brought
to Add a missing verb
is brought
payment
will make the traveller not safe during their travel, Use synonyms
hence
Linking Words
cashless
Use synonyms
transaction
can be a solution.Fix the agreement mistake
transactions
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task achievement
Make sure to fully address both parts of the question. Provide reasons why some people might not be happy to give up using cash.
coherence cohesion
Enhance the clarity and organization of your ideas. Each paragraph should focus on a single main idea with clear topic sentences.
task achievement
Include more specific examples or evidence to support your points and make your arguments stronger.
general
Your essay presents understandable and relevant ideas regarding the future of cashless payments.
task achievement
You have attempted to explain the benefits of cashless transactions clearly.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion of your essay are present, providing a clear structure.
Fully explain your ideas
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