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the graphs below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant

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 a report from 2008 about the
USA
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USA's

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 use of energy since 1980 with future predictions until 2030.
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, the consumption of all sources has increased except hydropower which is projected to remain relatively stable. Petrol and oil started the time as the highest source that used energy with 35 quadrillion
units
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, and it rose gradually year on year with
projection
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a projection

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 to reach nearly 42 quadrillion
units
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 in 2030. Natural gas and coal began at 20 and nearly 16
units
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 and despite some fluctuations, there will be a significant increase in coal to approximately 30
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 natural gas is predicted to stay the same after its slight growth. Even though nuclear, solar and hydropower consumed the same amount of energy in 1980, nuclear and solar will increase their use of power to nearly 8 and 5 quadrillion
units
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 respectively.
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

; hydropower will remain at the same level of consumption over the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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