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The line graph portrays the average figure of American people who visit a museum at a certain time in two seasons such as summer and winter in 2003.

The line graph portrays the average figure of American people who visit a museum at a certain time in two seasons such as summer and winter in 2003.
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The line graph portrays the average figure of American people who visit a museum at a certain time in two seasons
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 as summer and winter in 2003.
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, the graph shows that the number of
visitors
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 in summer was consistently significantly higher than that of winter throughout the period. Looking at the line graph, in summer, in 2003,
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 was the best season to visit the museum in the UK so it had a large number of
visitors
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. The
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 in
visitors
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 in the UK peaked at approximately 1500 from 0 am to 11:30 am. After that, the figure of
visitors
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 gradually reduced in the evening to 1190 at 13:30 pm and 800 at 15:30 pm.
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, the American participants who visited the museum went home from
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 period to close time. In winter, there were many fluctuations in
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 season, especially from 9:30 am to 11:30 am, the figure of
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 went up at 500 and went down at 450 and still that until it reached 600. From that,
visitors
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 gradually decreased to close at 14:30 pm.
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