Part 1. The bar chart shows the percentage of school children learning to play different musical instrument in 2005, 2010 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the proportions of school pupils learning to play four
type
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types
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of music
music
instrument
Including Replace the word
musical
Piano
,Drums,Guitar
and Violin in 3 diffrent
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different
year
.
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years
Overall
,In 2005 and 2010 Piano
was most
popular Correct article usage
the most
while
in 2015 Guitar
surpassed the Piano
In trems
of lowest in 2005 and 2010 Drums Correct your spelling
terms
was
at Correct subject-verb agreement
were
bottom
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the bottom
whereas
in 2015 reached the third place.
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According
Accroding
to the bar chart,Correct your spelling
According
Guitar
consequently
saw increase
in Add an article
an increase
number
of Add an article
the number
participent
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participant
participants
For
instance
in 2005 likely 10% Add a comma
instance,
grow
to Wrong verb form
grew
the
approximately 20% in 2010
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apply
Piano
experienced growth,However
in 2015 back behind Guitar
with
less Change preposition
by
40
%
Change preposition
than 40
According to
the information provide
,In 2005 Violin was at Change the form of the verb
provided
same
percentage Correct article usage
the same
with
two other Change preposition
as
instrument
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instruments
Whereas
in 2010 drop back and saw a decrease in numbers with less 10
%
In 2015, Drums exceeded Violin and stood at third rank place with almost 10%Change preposition
than 10
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the seventh paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words piano, guitar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the seventh paragraph.
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