Some people believe that teenagers should focus on all school subjects. But others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject that they are good at or that they find the most interest. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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The issue of academic specialisation is debatable, as some people encourage learners to focus only on
subjects
that they have
interest
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in,
while
others believe
thats
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that
students should learn all school
subjects
.
This
essay will discuss both sides, on the one
hand
, exposing teenagers to all
subjects
may cause work overload management issues, yet
on the other
hand
concentration on a specific subject of
interest
will boost the child's confidence and
guarantees
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success and good grades. I will explain fully why I support the idea of one area
specialisation
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of specialisation
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. On the one
hand
, forcing learners to take all
subjects
is not a good idea because a lot of
student
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students
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struggle to balance the
work-load
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workload
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. As some say, "Jack of all trades and master of non",
this
is what happens when teenagers are exposed to all
subjects
. Some children find it
difficults
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difficult
to concentrate
in
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all
subjects
at once since most of these
subjects
do not link or relate.
For example
, after studying arts
subjects
then
they are called for business and science
subjects
. They end up being confused and
loose
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interest
in learning leading to school drop-outs.
On the other
hand
, encouraging students to concentrate on areas of their
interest
gives them confidence and they will be fully engaged
to
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in
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learning all aspects of that subject.
This
certainly guarantees success and high grades
therefore
boosting their
self esteem
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.
For instance
, if a student is interested in calculations they should encourage him to take
subjects
like Statistics and
Mathamatics
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Mathematics
then
they groom him around that area. These students will develop passion
in
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what they do because they love it. In conclusion, I strongly believe that learners should be given the opportunity to focus on
subjects
that they have
interest
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an interest
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in as it helps them to achieve better grades, rather than being forced to take all school
subjects
and end up suffering from work overload.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Comprehensive education
  • Specialization
  • Well-rounded
  • Motivation
  • Foundational knowledge
  • Significant contributions
  • Narrow focus
  • Limited perspective
  • Adaptability
  • Economic benefits
  • Balanced approach
  • Foundational education
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