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The charts below show the average consumption of three nutrients by adults in the UK. All of these nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The charts below show the average consumption of three nutrients by adults in the UK. All of these nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The charts illustrate the information of consumption food by adults in four main meals through 24 hours, and the proportion of three
category
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categories
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 of nutrients which are sodium, saturated fat and added
sugar
. As an initial overview, the lowest percentage is in breakfast with 13% - 16% and all of the elements with less different. Not only is
this
 point clear, but
also
 in lunch the percentage of sodium, saturated fat and added
sugar
 do not have high difference and all of them around 20% - 30%. A more details look at the charts reveals that dinner has the lowest ratio
in
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of
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 added
sugar
 by just 19%,
whereas
 it records 42% in sodium and 39% in saturated fat.
In contrast
, snacks have the highest proportion of added
sugar
 with 45%,
however
, have
tiny
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a tiny
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 ratio of other nutrients
as
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apply
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around 15% and 19%
Finally
, the most significant meal is breakfast, but we can note that adults do not care about
this
 meal,
moreover
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moreover,
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 their snacks are unhealthy
bacause
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because
amount of
sugar
 in
it
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them
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.
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