The charts below show the average consumption of three nutrients by adults in the UK. All of these nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average consumption of three nutrients by adults in the UK. All of these nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts illustrate the information of consumption food by adults in four main meals through 24 hours, and the proportion of three
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of nutrients which are sodium, saturated fat and added
sugar
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. As an initial overview, the lowest percentage is in breakfast with 13% - 16% and all of the elements with less different. Not only is
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point clear, but
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in lunch the percentage of sodium, saturated fat and added
sugar
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do not have high difference and all of them around 20% - 30%. A more details look at the charts reveals that dinner has the lowest ratio
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added
sugar
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by just 19%,
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it records 42% in sodium and 39% in saturated fat.
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, snacks have the highest proportion of added
sugar
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with 45%,
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, have
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ratio of other nutrients
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around 15% and 19%
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, the most significant meal is breakfast, but we can note that adults do not care about
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meal,
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moreover
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their snacks are unhealthy
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because
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in
it
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