You live in small university town. Last week you drove to big city about two hours away to buy a new laptop at a good price. You worked on the laptop all week and finished writing a long assignment that is due shortly. However this week the laptop doesn't even switch on. Write to the store. In your letter: ● Tell the store where you live & what happened ● Explain the problem with the laptop ● State what action you would like the store to take
Dear Sir/Madam
My name is Umida and I live in
small
university town. Add an article
a small
the small
Last
week I bought Linking Words
Use synonyms
laptop
from your store. Honestly, your items are affordable and I bought Add an article
a laptop
the laptop
it
at Correct pronoun usage
them
good
price. So, Add an article
a good
usually
I do my assignments on the Add a comma
usually,
laptop
. But Use synonyms
this
week the Linking Words
laptop
doesn'Use synonyms
t
switch on. I didn'Use synonyms
t
know why it happened.
Use synonyms
Few
days ago, I worked on the Change the article
A few
laptop
Use synonyms
a
long time, the next day I tried to turn Change preposition
for a
on
but I didn'Correct pronoun usage
it on
t
and I was worried. I guess, at that time I worked a lot. But your employees told me "The Use synonyms
laptop
works very well " . They cheated me. Use synonyms
Then
I took the Linking Words
laptop
to the master. He Use synonyms
also
tried to turn Linking Words
on
and he did. Correct pronoun usage
it on
However
, he said to me " There is Linking Words
fault
in the parameters and if I fix the Add an article
a fault
laptop
, it
might break again ". Use synonyms
Then
I was very upset.
I need Linking Words
Use synonyms
laptop
because I always work on the Add an article
a laptop
laptop
. If I don'Use synonyms
t
finish my assignments Use synonyms
this
week I will be punished. If I Linking Words
will
buy Verb problem
apply
new
Add an article
a new
laptop
there Use synonyms
aren'
Change the verb form
isn't
t
store in my town. Please help me and give me Use synonyms
brend
new Correct your spelling
brand
laptop
or pay back my money. I will buy another Use synonyms
laptop
from Use synonyms
other city
.Change the wording
another city
other cities
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task achievement
Ensure to include more specific information, such as the exact purchase date or model of the laptop, to make your complaint clearer.
task achievement
Work on developing a more formal tone suitable for a business letter. Phrases like 'your employees cheated me' can be written in a milder way like 'I felt misled by your staff's assurances.'
coherence cohesion
Try to improve paragraph structure by ensuring that each paragraph clearly focuses on one idea or issue.
task achievement
You have correctly included all the necessary information about where you live, what happened, the problem with the laptop, and the action you would like the store to take.
coherence cohesion
The opening and closing of the letter are properly formatted, including an appropriate 'Dear Sir/Madam' salutation and a polite closing request.
The Closing
The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.
Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.
Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)
- Yours faithfully,
Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)
- Yours sincerely,
Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)
- Best regards,
- Warm wishes,