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Band 1.5

Writing Task 1 - you are soon going to spend three months doing work experience in an organisation.

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Dear Sir,
Firstly
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, I would like to say how
I
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much I
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appreciate
for
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the opportunity to do
this
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work
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. I hope to learn new strategies,
techniques
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and techniques
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 which I can use with the
work
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 experience. I would like to provide you the
work
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 experience which can be positive for the organisation.
Firstly
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, I have a lot of experience from my
last
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 job, where I
did
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 a hotel manager and I took care
about
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of about
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 10 employees. I think that I have
a
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very strong organisation skills, I love
to
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working in
the
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 team.
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, I am a
friendly going
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 person.
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, I am
a
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young and don´t have children and I can
work
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 more
flexible
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. I am so excited to
work
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 with you. Kind regards Andrea Kroupova
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coherence cohesion
Your letter is satisfactorily structured. However, try to organize it with clear paragraphs for each main idea (e.g., introduction, skills/experience, personal qualities) to make it more reader-friendly.
task achievement
Expand on your examples and details. Instead of stating that you have strong organizational skills, you could provide specific instances or achievements that illustrate this.
task achievement
You clearly express enthusiasm and appreciation for the opportunity.
task achievement
You have provided a good range of qualities and experiences that make you a suitable candidate for the position.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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