You have bought a new camera but when you got it home you found it had some problems. You returned the camera and spoke to the company representative a week ago but the camera has still not been repaired. Write a letter to the company Your letter ▪️Introduce yourself ▪️Explain the situation ▪️Say what action you would like the company to take

Dear Sir/Madam I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with poor service in your company. My name is Lobar Ravshanova and I am a photographer. I went to your shop
last
week to buy a new
camera
because my
camera
was broken. I bought
camera
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one of the new
brand
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which was pretty good but when I got home found out
camera
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the camera
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has
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had
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a
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some problems. I returned the
camera
and
spoke to
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the company that
camera
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the camera
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has
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had
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some problems and it didn'
t
work properly. I am disappointed
of
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your service because they promised that they
will
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would
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return
camera
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the camera
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greatest two days but now
seventh
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the seventh
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day
pass
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has passed
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but
camera
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the camera
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has
not
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still not
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been repaired
still
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yet
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. I tried repeatedly to call
to
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you
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service but showed
any
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no
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signs. If they can'
t
able to fix it in two they didn'
t
had
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have
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promise
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a promise
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. Now I bought another
camera
and I don'
t
need
replacement
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a replacement
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. I look for to receiving a full refund. Yours faithfully Lobar
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coherence cohesion
Ensure all grammatical and spelling errors are minimized. For example, 'camera has a some problems' should be 'camera has some problems.'
coherence cohesion
To enhance coherence, separate distinct ideas into different paragraphs. For example, details about the issue and your dissatisfaction with the service should be in different paragraphs.
task achievement
You introduced yourself and explained the situation clearly, which is a crucial part of the task.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is appropriate and formal, which fits well with the context.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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