You have bought a new camera but when you got it home you found it had some problems. You returned the camera and spoke to the company representative a week aga but the camera has still not been repaired. Write a letter to the company In your letter ■introduce yourself ■explain the situation ■say what action you would like the company to take

Dear Sir or Madam I am one of your customers and I bought a kind of technologies that have good quality.
However
,
this
time I am writing
complaint
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about
camera
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a camera
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which I bought
15days
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15 days
ago from your company in Green Street. My job as
photographer
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a photographer
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including
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travel
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travelling
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to
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a kind of country and
take
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photos
them
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of them
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. It was unsatisfactory to
working
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and had a different problem. After using
camera
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the camera
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, I
didn't
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satisfy
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to
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my work and lost my partners who had
a very good qualifications
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very good qualifications
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. The camera that I bought is
V380
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a V380
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Pro 4Mp Ultra HD model. When I bought it, saler introduced
information
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the information
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and he assured
it
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me it
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was working well
to
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me. After I got home and took
photo
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a photo
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my
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garden, it
hasn't
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working well. In the following days, I
have
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found that there were
less
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effects and memory problems. Despite the fact, I have returned it and spoke problems to your company a week ago, it has still not been repaired. I would be grateful if you could refund and reply
my
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letter. I look forward to your explanation.
Your
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faithfully Shodiyona
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coherence cohesion
The structure of your letter can be improved. Consider organizing your points more clearly, perhaps by adding a brief introduction, separate paragraphs for each main point, and a concise conclusion.
task achievement
While your letter covers all the necessary points, it could be clearer and more concise. Try to avoid repetitive phrases and unnecessary details.
task achievement
There are some grammar and vocabulary issues, such as 'a kind of technologies', 'take photos them', and 'saler'. A quick review and some corrections would make the letter more professional.
task achievement
You have provided all the necessary information, including your problem, past actions, and your desired solution.
suitable writing tone
The letter maintains a polite and respectful tone throughout, which is appropriate for this type of communication.

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