A friend you met last year has invited you to visit him/her in his/her country. You have never been there before and need some information before you leave. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: request some advice about a gift for his/her family ask about activities and clothing in his/her country find out about the food

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Dear Rasul, I am writing to need information about your
country
and your
country
's clothes,
food
,
activities
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and activities
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.
Firstly
, I want to give
some
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you some
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special
gift
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gifts
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for you and your family but I do not have
idea
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any idea
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about them.After a day I am going to
by
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buy
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books for you
also
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and also
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national
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the national
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dress and national
food
for your family.I think it will be
very
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a very
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good gift.
Secondly
,can you tell me about your
country
's clothes and
activites
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activities
.
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?
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I think your nation's people wear
hoodie
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hoodies
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and pants
also
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and also
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jeans because your
country
is very cold and damp.
In
addition
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addition,
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your nation's people activities
is
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are
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skiining
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skiing
skinning
and snowballing .
Furthermore
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Furthermore,
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hockey is famous in your
country
and your
county's
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country's
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players attend very well in every
competetion
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competition
.
Also
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there are lots of famous players I have some information about your
countr's
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country's
food
.People eat fast
food
and pizza because
this
food
is very famous in your
country
. I look forward to hearing from you.
Your
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Yours
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sincerely, Rajabov Aziz
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task achievement
Make sure to address all parts of the question in your letter to achieve a complete response. Make your requests and questions more detailed.
coherence cohesion
Organize your paragraphs better so that each one focuses on a single main idea. This will help improve the flow and readability of your letter.
coherence cohesion
Maintain a consistent and suitably polite tone throughout the letter.
coherence cohesion
The letter contains a polite closing that helps wrap up your message smoothly.
task achievement
You addressed the recipient directly and maintained a friendly tone, which is suitable for a letter to a friend.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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