The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of forzen fish pie. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of forzen fish pie. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons  where relevant.
Overall
, the diagram illustrates the process of the manufacture of frozen fish pies beginning with the delivery of
potatoes
and ending up with the storing or dispatching.
Firstly
, the
potatoes
are delivered by the truck
up
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to one month. After arriving at the manufacturing factory, the freshly arrived
potatoes
are
then
cleaned and
peel
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peeled
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. They are
then
sliced into smaller pieces and
place
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placed
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into pots to boil at a very high temperature until it is soft.
Next,
the
potatoes
are chilled and stored in plastic bags.
Following
this
, fresh
salmon
are delivered in less than 12 hours. After that, both lemon juice and salt are added to the
salmon
to intensify its flavour.
Subsequently
, they are steamed in the oven for about 15 minutes. The skins and bones of the
salmon
are
then
removed by manufacturers,
further
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and further
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checked by the inspectors to finish with the preparation of
salmon
.
Consequently
, peas, sauce,
salmon
and
potatoes
are put into a microwavable container
Finally
, the fish
pie
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pies
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are wrapped by the workers, left to
frozen
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freeze
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for a
while
and
are
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apply
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stored and dispatched.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words potatoes, salmon with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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