You recently bought some train tickets for a journey a week in advance. When you went to the station to cath the, you were told you could not use the tickets and the staff were very unhelpful to you.

Dear Sir, I had
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bad experience with the staff
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the train station. I bought the train ticket
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journey
a week in advance and I went to the station to catch the train, the staff told me that I couldn´t
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use
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ticket. I was really
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and I would like to explain why and what can I do.
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task achievement
Make sure to provide a detailed explanation of the situation, include specifics such as why the tickets were considered unusable and any interactions with the staff. This will improve the clarity and comprehensiveness of your task response.
coherence cohesion
Include an introduction and a conclusion to give your letter a clear structure. Begin with a brief introduction of your issue and close with a request for resolution or further action.
coherence cohesion
Ensure sentences flow logically from one to another to enhance coherence. For instance, connect how the surprise element and the unhelpful staff member relate to your request for an explanation.
task achievement
You clearly state the problem you encountered, which addresses the task prompt to an extent.
coherence cohesion
You used basic linking words appropriately (e.g., “and”), which contributes to cohesion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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