IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 8

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The bar chart compares the average amount of money spent by people on three types of goods across different
age
Use synonyms
 groups in Britain in 2004.
Overall
Linking Words
, it is clearly seen that the percentage of food and drink increased in accordance with the
age
Use synonyms
group
Use synonyms
.
While
Linking Words
 the biggest number of food or drink and entertainment was observed at the
age
Use synonyms
 between 61 to 75
years
Use synonyms
, the largest number of restaurants and hotels was seen at the
age
Use synonyms
 under 30
years
Use synonyms
. The figure for food and drink rose gradually from around 5% in the under 30
years
Use synonyms
group
Use synonyms
 to approximately 22% in the above 76
years
Use synonyms
group
Use synonyms
.
Similarly
Linking Words
, steady growth in the proportions of entertainment occurred from nearly 6% in the youngest
group
Use synonyms
 to a peak of roughly 22% in the second oldest
group
Use synonyms
, before falling dramatically to just under 15% in the oldest
group
Use synonyms
. Regarding restaurants and hotels, the youngest
group
Use synonyms
 had the largest percentage of total spending, accounting for just under 15%. Between the 31 to 60
years
Use synonyms
, that number remained stable at around 12%, before declining to roughly 2%, the lowest.
However
Linking Words
, the figure grew to around 5% in the oldest
group
Use synonyms
.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group, years with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
▼
Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • categories
  • age groups
  • residents
  • overview
  • breakdown
  • spending habits
  • comparison
  • trends
  • peaks
  • troughs
  • highest
  • lowest
  • significant
  • notable
  • priorities
  • shifts
  • lifestyle needs
  • financial constraints
  • patterns
What to do next:
Look at other essays: