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The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts
provides
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provide
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 information about the percentage of
workes
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workers
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 in three sectors across
Germany
,
USA
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the USA
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, Japan and
China
 in 1980 and 2010.
Overall
,
Agriculture
 in
China
hitting
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 the highest point in both years than the other countries. In
Germany
 and
Japan
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Japan,
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 the
industry
have
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has
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 Around 80%.
Germany
 was downward in
Agriculture
 for both years,
however
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industry
 accomplished a decrease in 2010. The services in
Germany
was increase
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increased
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around
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by around
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 ten
percent
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per cent
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 from 1980 50 2010.
In the
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 second-lowest
countries
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country
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 in
agriculture
 is The USA.
In addition
,
Industry
 suddenly
raise
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rose
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 in 2010.
Industry
 in Japan
rabidly
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rapidly
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 changed rate from around 50% in 1980 to 80% in 2010. There is a fluctuation in
there
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these
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 sectors in
China
.
Furthermore
,
agriculture
 was less
percent
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per cent
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 in 1980 unlike
2010
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in 2010
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. On
one
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the one
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 hand,
industry
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the industry
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 in both years
have
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has
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 the same rate around about 40%.
One
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On
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 the other hand,
services
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the services
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percent
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per cent
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 in
china
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China
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shrplly
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sharply
decrease
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decreased
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 from 1980 to 2012 decreased around -20%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words germany, china, agriculture, industry with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • sector
  • distribution
  • dominance
  • decline
  • significant changes
  • employment
  • patterns
  • trends
  • global
  • compare
  • highlight
  • examine
  • identify
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