The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
The illustrations
demonstrates
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the phases and equipment used in making
cement
and how
cement
is used in the production of concrete for
building
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buildings
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.
Overall
,
cement
production is
man-made
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a man-made
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linear process with six stages. It
is began
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with mixing limestone and clay,
ends
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and ends
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up by putting
cement
in bags for
following
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the following
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transporting. Concrete production,
in contrast
to
previous
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the previous
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one, only
have
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two stages and
have
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much more raw materials used in the process. First of all, limestone and clay are crushed by
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a crasher
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crasher
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and become powder which
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through
mixer
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the mixer
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. After
powder
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the powder
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are
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mixed in
mixer
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the mixer
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it
is went
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to
rotating
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a rotating
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heater where it is
heat
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heated
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up and
became
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cement
.
Then
, it is placed in bags and transported.
Consequently
,
cement
and water are placed in
concrete
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the concrete
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mixer
by 15% and 10% respectively.
Subsequently
, sand and gravel are
also
put in
concrete
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the concrete
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mixer
as the first one contains 25% of all concrete ,
whereas
gravel contains 50% of it.
Concrete
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mixer
mix
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mixes
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substance
by
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clockwise
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a clockwise
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direction .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • construction
  • cement-making
  • raw materials
  • crushing
  • mixing
  • heating
  • grinding
  • cement powder
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • concrete
  • versatility
  • strength
  • aggregate
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