The table below shows the proportion of the workforce who are women and the proportion of managers who are women in five different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the proportion of the workforce who are women and the proportion of managers who are women in five different countries.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates the proportion of the workforce who are
women
and the proportion of managers who are
women
in Australia,Egypt,
Sri
Lanka , Japan, United States.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the ratio of
women
in
labour
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force was the highest trend in four countries
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except
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Egypt
while
the percentage of
women
in management was the lowest point in
Sri
Lanka.
According to
what was shown in the table, Japan has a higher percentage
in
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workforce
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by about 48% .
However
, it decreased in management
around
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by
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about 31%. What is more, there are the same level of
women
in the workforce in two countries: Australia and
Sri
Lanka.
Therefore
,there are
the
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big differences
of
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proportions between them in management.
Women
in Australia
was
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rising up by about 34%
than
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more than
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women
in
Sri
Lanake. Added to that,
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, sri with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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