The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
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The charts illustrate the percentages of employed 60-64 years old
men
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and
women
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in Australia,
Japan
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, USA, and
Belgium
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in 1970 and 2000.
Overall
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,
Japan
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has the highest
percentage
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of
men
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and
women
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employed in 1970 and 2000
while
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Belgium
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has the lowest
percentage
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of female employees in 2000 and the USA has the lowest
percentage
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of male employees in 2000. In 1970,
Belgium
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had the lowest amount of female
workers
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with only 8%,
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is
in contrast
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with male
workers
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with 79% in the same year. Australian male workforce tripled the number of female
workers
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in 1970 with 74% and 18% respectively. In
Japan
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and the USA, the
percentage
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of employed
men
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is double that of
women
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with 84%
men
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and 43%
women
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for
Japan
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and 73%
men
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and 36%
women
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respectively.
On the other hand
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, in 2000, there was a decrease in the workforce of both
men
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and
women
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in
Japan
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and
Belgium
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. There was a significant drop of around 60% in
Belgium
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from 79% to 19%.
Men
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and
women
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workers
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in
Japan
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had a slight decrease with only 76% and 40% left employed. Working Australian
men
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also
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had a significant decline of around 50%.
However
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, both Australian and Japanese
women
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had a slight increase with 19% and 38% respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, japan, belgium, percentage, workers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Employment rate
  • Percentage
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Fluctuation
  • Gender disparity
  • Trend
  • Decline
  • Improvement
  • Variation
  • Noteworthy
  • Aligned
  • Comparative analysis
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