Some people think that it is a good thing for senior management positions to have much higher salaries than other workers in a company.To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In
this
day and age, most people think that the higher positions
in the company, the higher Correct article usage
the positions
salary
will be compared to normal Correct article usage
the salary
employees
.For me
personally, Change preposition
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partly agree that the Change the capitalization
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important
positions
will have good
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better
salary
than other workers.
On the one hand, The highest Fix the agreement mistake
salaries
salary
always depends on the person's position in business. For example
, managers and directors often have higher salaries than employees
because their jobs are more important and require more experience to perform. opposite other workers often hold positions
that are not too much
important and Correct quantifier usage
apply
not
require much experience in Add a missing verb
do not
manage
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management
thus
, senior management positions
often to
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apply
salary
than the Fix the agreement mistake
salaries
worker
.
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workers
On the other hand
, in the company
there Add a comma
company,
have
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are
employees
who receive higher salaries than their colleagues. There is a simple reason to explain that because those employees
are more productive than other colleagues, or maybe they have more achievements and talents.For instance
, workers
in Change preposition
for workers
marketing
and agency field, their Correct article usage
the marketing
salary
will be dependent productivity
and the number of their Change preposition
on productivity
customer
, if they have Fix the agreement mistake
customers
much client
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many clients
want
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who want
thier
service in that month they will Correct your spelling
their
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pay
salary
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salaries
other
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opporsite
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opportunities
Finally
, some companies will have special positions
that do not reflect the importance of the position through salary
.
in conclusion, the salary
also
can salary
also
can shows
the position of that employee, at the same time normal Change the verb form
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worker
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workers
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