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The table below shows percentages of students with different attitudes for facilities in the university in the UK in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mainfeatures, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows percentages of students with different attitudes for facilities in the university in the UK in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mainfeatures, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table compares the level of satisfaction with three categories of facilities in a UK university in 2008, which was measured in two groups of
students
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:
undergraduates
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 and
postgraduates
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.
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, it can be seen that there was no significant difference in the attitudes towards the facilities between the two groups of
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; both
undergraduates
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 and
postgraduates
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 were most satisfied with the study
facility
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,
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 the cafeteria was liked by the lowest percentage of
students
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. For the study
facility
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, almost all
students
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 expressed satisfaction, with 85% of
undergraduates
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 and 90% of
postgraduate
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postgraduates
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 very satisfied. Those who were not satisfied only accounted for around 5%.
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 applied to social
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facility
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 but the figure for
students
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 feeling very satisfied was slightly lower, with 75% for
undergraduates
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 and 65% for
postgraduates
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.
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,
although
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 the proportion of
postgraduates
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 not content with social
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facility
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facilities
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 was twice that of
undergraduates
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, the figures were still insignificant (10% and 5% respectively). Regarding
cafeteria
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the cafeteria
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, only half of the
undergraduates
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 were very satisfied, followed by 35% for those quite satisfied and 15% for those dissatisfied.
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, more
postgraduates
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 had negative feelings towards it (35%) and only 40% were very satisfied.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, undergraduates, postgraduates, facility with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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