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the charts below show the proportions of british students at one university in england who were able to speak other lanhuages in addition to english,in 2000 and 2010. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comoarison where relevent.

the charts below show the proportions of british students at one university in england who were able to speak other lanhuages in addition to english,in 2000 and 2010. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comoarison where relevent.
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The given pie charts illustrate information about the ability to speak
different
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 language, other than English for British students at the same
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university
uiversity
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university
 in England in the years 2000 and 2010
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, Spanish has a notable dominance in both years with 30 and 35
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percent
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 respectively.
On the other hand
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, there is a significant decrease who are not able to speak another language, from 20
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 to 10.
According to
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 the data which is related to the year 2000, the percentage of students who speak
Germany
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 and who are able to speak two other languages was equal and had
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a minority
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, by 10
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percent
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.
Similarly
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, the segment of French knowledge and ability to speak
another languages
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another language
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 had
equivalent
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an equivalent
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 with
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a slight
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slight
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 larger proportion, by 15
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percent
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per cent
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. As
it
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can
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be
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 seen
on
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 the illustration which
represent
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 the date about 2010, there was a
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 change in
the
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all categories. It is obvious that
three
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 categories had balanced at 10
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percent
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per cent
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, whilst
ability
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the ability
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 to speak Spanish and other languages proportion increased to 35 and 20
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percent
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, respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • significantly
  • increase
  • decrease
  • multilingual
  • bilingual
  • linguistic skills
  • global context
  • notable
  • trend
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