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You recently attended a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home, you found you had left some important papers at the hotel. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter: •say where you think you left the papers •explain why they are so important •tell the manager what you want him/her to do

Dear Mr John I hope I don't bother you. But
this
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 is very important for me.If you remember, I recently attended a meeting at your hotel and I left some crucial
papers
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 at the hotel.I returned home and I noticed that I didn't have my notable
papers
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. I think these
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are
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were
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 left on the desk in my room because I was working on
the
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 new project. Generally speaking, these
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 are my new project.
Last
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 week I went to show off
this
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 new project of mine.
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, I found a partner. But I realized that I had forgotten these essential
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.I really need these
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 right now.
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 of
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, we can not start work without these important
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. I would be terribly disappointed. Hopefully, you will definitely find and send me my significant
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.And I really wish I had not lost my important
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. I would like to thank all of your hotel. I hope that you will read my letter and reply in time. I will
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please
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of
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yours
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you
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 will send me my important
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. Thank you in advance!!!! Sincerely Fatima

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task achievement
For task response, ensure that each part of the prompt is addressed thoroughly. You've covered all the necessary points but try to be more specific about the actions you would like the manager to take.
coherence cohesion
Your letter generally follows a logical structure, but tightening the organization could make your points clearer. Consider combining related ideas to avoid repetition.
greeting and closing
Your greeting and closing are polite and suitable for a formal letter.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph addresses a single idea, which improves clarity.
suitable writing tone
The tone of your letter is appropriate for a formal request.
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