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The chart below shows the total number of minutes(in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided intot three categories , from 1995-2002 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the total number of minutes(in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided intot three categories , from 1995-2002 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar graph depicts the information regarding the
proportion
 of phone calls by British people which was categorised into three parts
such
 as local,
Mobiles
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,
nationl
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national
 and international during the time period of 1995-2002. The data is calibrated
jn
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in
Minutes
 ( billions).
Overall
, it is noticeable that the local
call
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calls
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 made by people
was
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were
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 tending down despite having the largest
proportion
 during the whole time period.
In contrast
, Moblie usage was in small
proportion
 but
showing
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showed
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the
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an
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 upward trend
similarly
, the interest of people
for
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in
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 making national and international was uphill. Looking into more
details
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detail
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, more than 70
minutes
(
billions
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billion
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)person
was
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were
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 using the telephone
for making
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to make
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the
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apply
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locals
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local
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 calls in 1995,which
was
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gradually
increasing
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increased
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 and reached
at
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90
minutes
 and remained constant until
next
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the next
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 year. It was seen a steady fall until
end
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the end
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 of
year
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the year
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 and reached
at
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apply
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the same
proportion
 which was in
the
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1995.
In contrast
, the value for national and international was less than 40
minutes
 which showed a
contined
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continued
 growth in the figures.
Additionally
 , the usage of mobile phones was negligible in 1995,it started
getting
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the
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popularity after 2000 and increased by
four folds
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fourfold
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 in 2002.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, minutes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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