The charts beloow show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak othe languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts beloow show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak othe languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts
depicts
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the
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information regarding the proportion of pupils who
was
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studying
in
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university in
UK
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the UK
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. They were not only able to speak in English but
also
have
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a tendency to talk in other languages as well during the time period of 2000 to 2010
Overall
,
the
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Spanish and other languages were used by most of the students in both
years
,
while
English users dipped after a decade. Looking into more details
that
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30% and 15% Spanish and other languages were spoken by pupils in 2000 which
was
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increased by 5% after ten
years
,made up of 35 and 20 percent , respectively .
In contrast
, there was a drop in the figures
of
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french
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users that was 20% in 2000 and halved after ten
years
.
Similarly
, in the use of
English
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it was 15%. Which became 10%
in
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the end of
year
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the year
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.The proportion of other pie slices
were remained
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remained
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constant throughout the
years
.
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