You work for an international company.You have seen an advertisiment for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager.In your letter: #describe the training course you want to do #explain what the company could do to help you #say how the course will be useful for your job

Dear Sir or Madam,I am writing to request your assistance concerning the matter of
training
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course.
Firstly
,you will take any details about
myself
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from Telegram.I work for an international
company
.Yesterday,I
have seen
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an
advertisiment
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advertisement
for
training
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a training
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course when I
explore
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the city on foot with my friends.For the
last
5 years,I have been working in the position Of teaching
student
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students
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at
international
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an international
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company
.I am enquiring as to whether you currently have any positions in the area of training
course
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courses
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which will be useful for my job.I am a driven and ambitious person who is keen to teach new skills.I am a good
company
.I feel that I am the most suitable
condidate
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candidate
for
this
job.First of all,I
explain
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what could do to help me.If you will accept my letter and let me work,I would be happy.I work at
company
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the company
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.
Northeless
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Nonetheless
,my family has a few flaws.
Thus
,it will be useful for me.I sometimes spend
time
with my phone.I play online games
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my telephone when I have
a
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apply
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extra
time
.The
sellphone
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cellphone
often distracts me.I am going to stop
waste of
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time
.I hope that my request will not inconvenience you too much.Thank you for taking the
time
to read through my application.Should you need any
further
details,please do not hesitate to call me
. .
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Yours faithfully, Komiljonova Komilaxon
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The letter needs a clearer structure. Try to organize your thoughts into distinct paragraphs: introduction, description of the course, how the company can help, and how the course will benefit your job.
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Expand more on how the training course will be beneficial for your role in the company. Specific examples would help.
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Avoid including irrelevant details, such as personal flaws or activities. Focus on the main purpose of your letter to maintain a suitable professional tone.
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You addressed the recipient politely, which is good for maintaining a formal tone.
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Your enthusiasm and commitment to professional development are commendable.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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