You recently noticed a local restaurant that was offering a part-time job . Write a letter to the restaurant's manager. In your letter, –explain that you would like to apply for the job –give some details of any relevant experience that you have –specify the days and times that would suit you

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in order to apply for a part-time
job
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. I noticed an advertisement on the local board and I decided to take a part of
this
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job
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as a waiter.
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, I reckon that your restaurant is the best choice for me. I want to work in a part-time
job
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,
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apply
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because I study at Foreign Languages University.
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, my friends told me all
good
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the good
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things about your place and I got intrigued
in
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it.
Moreover
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, I have some experience that will be suitable for
this
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job
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.
Firstly
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, I worked as a waiter 2 years ago and my manager has never complained about me. I left my past
job
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because I moved to another city.
Secondly
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, I know that character is one of the vital
part
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of working .I can easily communicate with other people.
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, If somebody
come
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comes
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to our restaurant in a bad mood, I can put a smile on
it’s
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face without any difficulty.
Thirdly
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, I know 5 languages that are, Chinese, English, Uzbek, Russian and Indian.
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, I want to inform you about my availability.
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my lack of
time
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time,
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I will be able to work
in
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the night- shift
on
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every Monday, Wednesday and Sunday. Looking forward to hearing from you soon and accepting my application to your restaurant. Yours faithfully Mohinur
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task achievement
Your letter generally addresses all parts of the task. However, you could provide more detail regarding how your experience will benefit the restaurant directly.
coherence cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, try to link ideas within paragraphs more smoothly. Use transition words to connect sentences logically.
coherence cohesion
Be cautious of minor grammatical errors, such as 'take a part of this job' should be 'take part in this job' or 'I got intrigued in it' should be 'I became intrigued by it.'
task achievement
You have addressed all key points required by the prompt, showing a clear understanding of the task.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is polite and formal, which is appropriate for the context.
coherence cohesion
The letter has an organized structure with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, making it easy to follow.
task achievement
You have successfully elaborated on your relevant experience, which strengthens your application.
coherence cohesion
Expressing your enthusiasm for the job and mentioning your connection to the restaurant through friends adds a personal touch, which is engaging.

Contractions

Formal and informal language refers to using different forms of language in different settings.

In informal writing, you can use contractions such as I’ll and Сan’t.

In formal writing, you should write I will and Can not.

Do not use exclamation mark in formal writing, but you can use it in informal writing.

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