You recently noticed a local restaurant that was offering a part-time job. Write a letter to the restaurant's manager.In your letter, •explain that you would like to apply for the job •give some details of any relevant experience that you have •specify the days and times that would suit you.

Dear,Sir or Madam I am writing to inquire about I will work offering a part-time position. Well, actually, I am from Uzbekistan, but I moved to Turkey because of my study. I am studying at Turkey University.
Therefore
, I need a
working
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in
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my
sped-time
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.I have read your advertisement
of
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the street walls and I would like to get more information. I am hoping you would pressure me with some information and document requirements so that I can apply for my job. I have studied at Tukey University for three months.I am
interesting
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cooking
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in cooking
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food.
In addition
,
I
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the Uzbekistan, I
was
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worked more restaurants.I want to
working
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here. Generally speaking, I would really like it if you could possibly give me details of your local
restaurant
. I have cooked food since I was studying at school. So I have relevant experience.
In addition
my parents
also
cookers
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in
the
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uzbek
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restaurant
. My personal opinion is that
this
is a job useful for my free time. Well actually, your local
restaurant
I
also
liked your salary.I hope you are helping me.
This
job needs me.
Due to
, your
restaurant
helping me to suffer financially. Hopefully, you can not it I look forward to receiving a prompt reply. Yours sincerely Fatima.
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task achievement
Expand on your relevant experience in more detail and clearly connect it to the job you are applying for.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph focuses on a single idea. This helps your writing to be clearer and more organized.
coherence cohesion
Proofread your work to correct minor grammatical mistakes and ensure sentences are clear.
coherence cohesion
You included a polite greeting and closing, which is essential in a formal letter.
task achievement
You expressed clear interest in the job and provided some relevant background information.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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