You recently noticed a local restaurant that was offering a part-time job. Write a letter to the restaurant's manager. In your letter • Explain that you would like to apply for the job • Give some details of any relevant experience that you have • Specify the days and times that would suit you

Dear Sir or Madam My name is Pokiza and I am a student of INHA University. I noticed that you were offering a part-time
job
and I would like to ask
to
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you to
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give
this
job
to me. At the beginning
that
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apply
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I told you I am a student in the case, If you give me a
job
, I have to save money to pay the bills.
On the other
hand
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I can do everything except that cooking. Because I am afraid of
burn
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burning
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the dishes
while
cooking. I can mop the floor and
also
I can wash the dishes. If you will give me a
job
from
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at
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your restaurant I'll really appreciate you.
The most
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importantly If you
will offering
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offer
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me a
job
I have
a
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apply
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time after my lessons. So to be honest my lessons
starts
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start
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at
the
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apply
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9 a.
m
. and
it
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apply
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ends at
the
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12.30 p.
m
.
In
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this
point
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point,
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I would like to work
at
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in
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the daytime
14.00
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from 14.00
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p.
m
. to 20.00 p.
m
. I hope you as soon as offer
ma
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me
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a
job
quickly. I look forward to your reply Yours faithfully Pokiza
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suitable writing tone
Be careful with your language to maintain a consistent tone throughout your letter. For instance, a more formal tone would be preferable when addressing a potential employer, which means avoiding expressions like 'give this job to me' and instead using 'I am writing to express my interest in the part-time job opportunity at your esteemed restaurant.'
logical structure
Avoid redundancy and clarify your points. For example, 'On the other hand' suggests a contrast but is misused here. Instead, directly state your willingness to perform the various tasks, like 'I have experience in mopping floors and washing dishes, and am confident that I can contribute positively to your team.'
complete response
You clearly state your availability and working hours, which helps the manager to know when you can work.
complete response
Your letter covers all required content: expressing interest, providing relevant experience, and detailing your availability.
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