The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
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The percentages of males and females aged 60-64 in
employment
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in four different countries in certain periods between 1970 and 2000 were shown in that picture.
Overall
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, it can be pointed out from the charts that, Japan was the highest
while
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Belgium was the least in a specific period.
On the other hand
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, the men aged 60-64 in
employment
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higher than the women in a given period. It is obvious from the first picture that, Japan started at 85% and
then
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it dropped by 74% male aged 60-64 in
employment
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.
However
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, Belgium jumped down from 79% to 19% and it took place
last
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place than other countries.
According to
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the second graph , the number of women aged 60-64 in
employment
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increased in three various countries between 1980 and 2000,
in contrast
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, only Japan went down from 43 to 40. In the USA went up from 36% to 39% between 1970 and 2000.
Also
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, Australia had risen by 18%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words employment with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Employment rate
  • Percentage
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Fluctuation
  • Gender disparity
  • Trend
  • Decline
  • Improvement
  • Variation
  • Noteworthy
  • Aligned
  • Comparative analysis
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