The table shows the number of employees and factories producing silk in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart reveals how many people worked and how many
factories
stood for manufacturing silk in England and Wales between 1851 and 1901.
The number
of male employees
decreased for the period
. The number
slightly changed from 55,338 to 54,204 by 1861. This
was followed by the
rapid decrease to 35,114 in 1871. After Correct article usage
a
the
slight decrease to 32,838 by 1881, the Correct article usage
a
figure
declined to 21,153 in 1891, finishing to
19,414 in 1901.
The Change preposition
at
figure
for female employees
experienced the
similar downward trend as the Correct article usage
a
figure
for male. The female employee’s figure
started at 74,687 in 1851, which is the highest among the period
, and showed a stead
decrease to 42,545 by 1881. Correct your spelling
steady
Although
the pace of falling number
was once moderated between 1881 and 1891, after 1891, the pace of going down the figure
was recovered and the figure
finished at 27,843.
The figure
for total employees
also
experienced downward
trend from 130,025 to 47,2257 at the same pace Correct article usage
a downward
among
the Change preposition
during
period
, except for the sudden plunge between 1861 to 1871 from 118,856,
to 87,435.
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In contrast
, the figure
for factories
was increased. The figure
stood at 272 in 1851,
and soared to its high of 768 by 1861. After that came a dropping Remove the comma
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number
to 698 in 1871. Despite a slight climbing the figure
to 704 in 1881, the figure
for factories
finally
decreased to 625 by 1901.
In summary, the number
of employees
was
decreased Unnecessary verb
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the
Change preposition
during the
period
regardless of their gender, and the figure
for the factories
was
increased Unnecessary verb
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by contrast
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