You and your family have just come back from a holiday staying in a rented apartment overlooking the sea. The apartment was very unsatisfactory. Write a letter of complaint to the manager of the agency from which you rented the apartment. In your letter, – give details of the things that were unsatisfactory – explain the reactions of the members of your family – ask the manager what he/she is going to do about the situation
Dear Sir or Madam
I am writing to complain about the problem with the
apartment
that I stay in a rented apartment
with my family
I and my family come
back from holiday that summer’s biggest holiday and I Add a missing verb
are come
look
for Wrong verb form
am looking
apartment
which Add an article
an apartment
is overlooking
the sea. I see a lot of apartments but your Wrong verb form
overlooks
apartment
aroused interest
so Correct pronoun usage
my interest
that
Correct word choice
apply
i
Change the capitalization
I
rent
your Wrong verb form
rented
apartment
if you could
remember, you told me that there Verb problem
apply
are
new Wrong verb form
were
technologies
that i
rented Change the capitalization
I
apartment
that Correct article usage
an apartment
i
and my family used these Correct pronoun usage
apply
technologies
and found out that they are old technologies
. The days getting warmer, air
conditioner is needed but your air conditioner Add an article
the air
an air
not
worked well
Add a missing verb
has not
Then
my father said me why you
rented the old Correct pronoun usage
I
apartment
that
there are Correct word choice
and why
not
new Correct your spelling
no
technologies
for use. All my family members fight me because nothing in this
apartment
can be used and the technologies
are old and do not look good the sea
If you have another apartment
which is like the apartment
, i
rent Change the capitalization
I
this
apartment
which is overlooking the sea. If you do not have another apartment
, you need to provision of
new Change preposition
apply
technologies
or you need to give me money back
Look forward to hearing from you soon
Yours faithfully ObitooSubmitted by omondavlat91 on
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single idea per paragraph
Try to structure your paragraphs better by addressing one main idea per paragraph. This will make your letter easier to read and understand.
suitable writing tone
There are some grammatical errors and awkward phrases that should be corrected to improve clarity and professionalism. For example, 'I stay in a rented apartment' should be 'I stayed in a rented apartment.'
suitable writing tone
In a formal letter, try to avoid colloquial phrases and be more precise. For instance, instead of 'my family members fight me,' you could say 'my family members were very upset with me.'
complete response
The letter addresses all parts of the task, providing details about the unsatisfactory conditions, the reactions of the family, and what action is expected from the manager.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing of the letter are appropriately formal, which is suitable for a complaint letter.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite