The charts below show the average percentage in typical meals of sodium, saturated fats, and added sugars, all of which may unhealthy if eaten too much.

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The pie charts below display the rates of certain nutrients in typical meals eaten in the United States of America.

Overall

, sodium and saturated fat

Correct subject-verb agreement

are

show examples

mostly consumed during

dinner

Moreover

, sugar happens to be inside of

majority

Add an article

the majority

show examples

of snacks. Meanwhile,

breakfast

Correct article usage

the breakfast

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period contains the lowest amount of all three mentioned categories.

Firstly

, sodium appears in high amounts

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dinner

and lunch with 43% and 29% each.

While

snack and

breakfast

food includes the same number of nutriment, being 14%.

Secondly

, saturated fat shows practically the same results as the

last

nutritive, with

dinner

and lunch being at the lead, with 37% and 26% each, and snack and

breakfast

locating

Wrong verb form

located

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at the bottom, with 21% and 16% each.

However

, sugar seems to be consumed through sweets more than other intervals (42%). Lunch and

dinner

showed the medium output, with 23% and 19% each. Unsurprisingly,

breakfast

comes at the bottom of the ratings again with a slightly

Correct word choice

higher

show examples

rate of 2%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words dinner, breakfast with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.

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2Word repetition
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nutrient breakdown
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saturated fats
added sugars
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