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The diagrams below show a site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show a site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given diagrams illustrate the design of an airport plan in two stages, the current version and the
post development
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 format after the completion of development next year.
Overall
, it can be seen that access to bag drop, ATM, sky train, shops and car hire will be provided next year
while
 walkway is going to be removed.
Furthermore
, the area at the top will be expanded and a V shape space will be added to it next year to
accomodate
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accommodate
 more planes.
Firstly
, The walkway will be
ommited
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omitted
, the square area will be enhanced by
addition
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 of a
V shaped
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 area on it providing
the
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room for 18 planes
instead
 of 8 to board passengers.
Moreover
, there will be access to
newly
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the newly
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 constructed sky train inside the expanded boarding hall
while
 there will be several airport markets available just outside the hall.
Secondly
, locations of Security, passport control,
customes
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customs
customers
, departure and arrival entrance and exit will
remaine
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remain
remained
 unchanged. Meanwhile, there will be a new cafe on the arrival side,
also
 an ATM and a car hire will be added there.
Additionally
, on the departure side, check-in will be moved to the right to replace the cafe,
while
 bag drop will replace the check-in and the cafe will be relocated to the south of it.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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