The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph shows the proportion of visitors to England who visited certain Brighton tourist spots between 1980 and 2010.
Overall
, it can be seen that the percentage of people visiting the pier and pavilion, despite fluctuations, increased over the 30-year period. The figure for those deciding to go to the art gallery dropped significantly over the time span, whilst the proportion of festivalgoers stayed relatively stable. During the 1980s and 1990s, there was a sharp increase in visitors to the pavilion from around 23% to about 48%, and
then
the percentage declined significantly to approximately 31% in 2010. The trend for the art gallery was similar to the pavilion. Visitor numbers increased rapidly from about 22% to around 37% from 1980 to 1985 and
then
decreased to just below 10% over the next 25 years. The number of tourists who visited Brighton’s festival experienced only slight fluctuations, never falling below 25% or rising above 30%. Visitors to the pier fluctuated from 1980 to 2000 between roughly 4% and almost 15% and
then
rose significantly from around 12% to approximately 22% between 2000 and 2010.
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