You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letter. • describe the problem with the equipment • explain how this problem is affecting your work • say what you want the shop or company to do

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Dear
sir
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Sir
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or
madam
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,
Iʼm
Jasmina and
Iʼm
writing about a problem with a piece of equipment that I use for my job. I was working at home and
then
suddenly did not work that I purchased from your
company
. At
first
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first,
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it was working fine and
then
suddenly it overheated and stopped working. I thought you sold me a defective or substandard product. I am one of the regular customers in your
company
. I have purchased many
equipments
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equipment
from your
company
and they have all been
good
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of good
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quality and have not broken down so far. I really need that
decide
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right now because I'm working on an important experiment right now.
Iʼm
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I am
very busy these days and I can't go to your
company
. I ask you to exchange the product I bought for another one. Your
company
must
be come
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to my house. Because you know that
Iʼm
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I am
very
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a very
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busy person. Call me and I will give you my address.
Your
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faithfully Jasmina
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains a single, clear idea to improve readability and logical structure.
task achievement
Specify the equipment more clearly to give better context. Also, provide more details on the impact on your work.
greeting and closing
You have included a greeting and closing, which adds to the formal tone of the letter.
suitable writing tone
The tone is generally suitable for a formal complaint letter, though could be slightly more polite and professional.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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