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A friend is considering buying a house nearby, but you have decided to leave the area due to a rise in crime. Write a letter to your friend advising them not to move into the neighborhood. In your letter: - Recommend that your friend not go ahead with the purchase - Give the reasons behind your decision to leave - Suggest possible alternative areas that you know

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Dear John, I hope you're doing great, I'm writing
this
 email to let you know about a serious thing that you have to think about before buying a new home, which is the increasing number of crimes in my
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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. I've heard that you're planning to buy a house
that is
 located
in
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the
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6th
street
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 which is very close to me. But I wanna warn you that
this
 area is not
good
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 as you think, and recently the police
has
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 reported a huge number of
killing
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murders in that place. Most of
people
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 who
is
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 living there
felt
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 very scared and have decided to move from
this
 area.
Therefore
, I
tends
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 to feel unsafe and I'm planning to move out
from
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this
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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,
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 and to look for calm and
scure
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secure
 areas in the city. I
suggests
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 that you come to live with me in the city centre. I think that you will like the vibes and the huge houses out there. If you need any
further
 help please contact me by email. See you soon, Best wishes, Nouf,
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coherence cohesion
Consider organizing your paragraphs more clearly. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea to improve clarity and coherence.
task achievement
Try to maintain a more consistent and formal tone throughout the letter. While friendly, some informal expressions might not be suitable for this type of advice letter.
task achievement
Your letter provides a complete response to the prompt, addressing all the required points: recommending not to buy, explaining your reasons for leaving, and suggesting an alternative area.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are well done, adding a touch of personal connection to your letter.

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