You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letter • describe the problem with the equipment • explain how this problem is affecting your work • say what you want the shop or company to do
Dear Sir or Madam,
Dear Sir or Madam I am writing
this
letter to vacuum
you regarding vacuum
cleaner that I purchased from you 3 weeks ago. Unfortunately, simultaneously engine and pump go pear-shaped.
First of all, to be exact the reason Correct article usage
the vacuum
of
Change preposition
apply
that
I bought Correct word choice
why
this
vacuum
cleaner was brand new. Then
I discern
Wrong verb form
discerned
cleaner's
engine Correct article usage
the cleaner's
is
heating, up by itself as if that's not enough pump Wrong verb form
was
also
doesn't clean well I would really appriciate
Correct your spelling
appreciate
this
but it was not only unsatisfactory but also
it makes
me feel disappointed.
Added to Wrong verb form
made
this
unaccompanied by vacuum
cleaner. I cannot catch up my
housework because if I sweep the house all the work gets stuck.
I suggest that you replace Change preposition
on my
item
and I look forward to receiving a Add an article
the item
fool
refund or you have to exchange the cleaner. Don't forget before Correct your spelling
full
exchange
the new cleaner by hook or crook check the cleaner. I think you can turn the table.
I look forward to your reply and a resolution to my problem
Change the verb form
exchanging
Correct the word
Yours
Your
faithfully,
JasminaCorrect your spelling
Yours
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task achievement
To improve your task response, make sure that you provide a clear and detailed description of the problem and its impact. Be more specific about how the equipment's issue affects your work.
coherence cohesion
Your letter should flow more logically. Make sure each paragraph addresses a single idea and follows a clear progression of thought. This makes the letter easier to read and understand.
coherence cohesion
Try to use more complex sentences and varied sentence structures to make your writing more engaging and natural.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing are appropriate and polite, which is important in formal letters.
task achievement
You made an effort to explain the problem and its impact on your work, which is the most important part of the task.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite