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The bar charts display the average percentage in typical meals of sodium, saturated fats, and added sugars, all of which may unhealthy if eaten too much.

The bar charts display the average percentage in typical meals of sodium, saturated fats, and added sugars, all of which may unhealthy if eaten too much.
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The pie charts depict the proportions of three sorts of nutrients in
breakfast
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, snack,
lunch
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 and
dinner
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 in America. If consumed too much, each of them may be harmful.
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, it is apparent that
dinner
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 has the highest percentage of sodium and saturated fat,
lunch
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 shows medium results, and
breakfast
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the
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 lowest percentage in all graphs.
The
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USA
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 people prefer more
sugar
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 in snacks. The first illustration represents that sodium is mostly eaten at
dinner
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 (43%),
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and 29
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% at
lunch
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. Meanwhile, snack and
breakfast
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 both have an equal percentage (14%). The second picture is about saturated fat which is most preferable for
dinner
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 too (37%),
lunch
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 is 11% lower than
dinner
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. Fat is used 21% in
lunch
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 and only 16% in snacks. The
last
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 graph demonstrates that individuals in the United States of America devour snacks with
sugar
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 (42%),
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moreover
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sugar
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 is one of the preferable nutrients for
dinner
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 (23%). When
lunch
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 illustrates 19%,
breakfast
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 displays 16% of
sugar
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words breakfast, lunch, dinner, sugar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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