During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants. Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter remind him when and where you met tell him what kind of job you are interested in say why you think you would be suitable for the job

Dear Mr Williams We had the pleasure of sitting next to each other during a flight from Ottawa to Los Angeles on the
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of August.I enjoyed our conversation and
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you suggested I contact you about job opportunities. I am writing in order to express my interest in a position within your organization, specifically in
customer
service
.Given my background in
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Customer
service
training and Cornell
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I believe that I could easily contribute to your team.
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extroverted person so I could easily get on with people around me even though I'm seeing them for the first time. I am confident that my
customer
service
excellence would make me a valuable asset to your restaurant.My previous experiences in university made me
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and knowledgeable.
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I would love to work in
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customer
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therefore
it is my major and
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I have been working as one for 3 years. Thank you for considering my application.I would love the opportunity to discuss
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roughly and how I can contribute to your business.Please feel free to contact me
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time. My number:09032400 Looking forward to your response. Yours sincerely Ravshanova Mars.
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coherence cohesion
To improve the logical structure, ensure each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. Focus on separating ideas more clearly and using transitional phrases.
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Make sure to proofread for minor errors such as punctuation, capitalization, and spacing. This can lift the overall impression of your letter.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are polite and appropriate for a professional letter.
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The writing tone is suitably professional and respectful, which is ideal for this context.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chain of restaurants
  • potential job opportunity
  • relevant experience
  • managerial role
  • customer service
  • qualifications
  • certifications
  • unique skills
  • eagerness
  • admiration
  • resume
  • references
  • face-to-face meeting
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