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The chart below shows the proportions of graduates from Brighton University in 2019 entering different employment sectors. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the proportions of graduates from Brighton University in 2019 entering different employment sectors. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided pie chart illustrates the proportions of graduates from Brighton University in 2019 who decided on different career paths.
Overall
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, it is immediately evident that percentages varied from 0.1% to 33% and 2.8% of graduates were categorized as 'other'.
To begin
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 with, the number of
students
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 who engaged in service
industries
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 was the highest, exceeding 33%,
while
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 that of
students
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 who went into sport sectors was the lowest, at around 0.1%. Specifically, manufacturing
industries
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 account for 16.3%, followed by 12.1% of politics & government sector, placing immediately behind service
industries
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. It is notable that 2.8% of
students
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 went into
industries
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 which were classified as 'other'. In
this
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 context, the figure for civil service, 5.6%, was exactly double that of
'other'
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the 'other'
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 category. Another noteworthy point is that only 0.3% of
students
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 chose the charity field, which was three times that of
sport
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the sport
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 area.
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, the proportions of trasnportaion&warehousing and science&technology were similar, accounting for 7.8% and 7.3% respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, industries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportions" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • employment sectors
  • graduates
  • significant
  • percentage
  • trend
  • compare
  • most chosen
  • least popular
  • distribution
  • highlight
  • graduate destinations
  • notable
  • cohesive understanding
  • employment trends
  • pie chart
  • bar chart
  • overview
  • chosen career paths
  • sector popularity
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