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The table shows the proportion of people in England who agree with same-sex marriage from 1989 to 2013.. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the proportion of people in England who agree with same-sex marriage from 1989 to 2013.. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table compares
number
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a number
the number
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 of
people
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 who agree with same-sex marriage in
England
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 between 1989 and 2013.
It is clear that
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 in 1989 atheists were more tolerant
while
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 only a few religious
people
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 in total agreed with
this
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 type of marriage.In 2013, the situation changed dramatically,more
people
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 in
England
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 became more tolerant no matter if they believed in god or not.
However
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, atheists stayed at the top in every year since 1989 increasing from 20 per
cent
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 to 77 per
cent
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 in 2013.
Also
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,there is a huge improvement among Roman Catholics ,they gained 52 per
cent
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 since
then
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 and now stay in the 2
place
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places
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 just after no religious
people
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.Almost
same
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the same
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 changes showed Church of
England
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people
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 and
from
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apply
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Other Christian
people
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,improving from 9 per
cent
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 to 55
percentages
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per cent
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 for
Church
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the Church
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 of
England
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 and 54 for Other Christians. It is obvious that non-Christians showed the least changes ,they were at the bottom of the top every year from 1989 until 2013 which describes them as not tolerant of same-sex marriage.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, england, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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