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The line graph below shows the consumption of 3 different types of fast food in Britain from 1970 to 1990. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The line graph below shows the consumption of 3 different types of fast food in Britain from 1970 to 1990. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The given line graph compares the
preferation
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preparation
perforation
of
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for
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hamburger
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hamburgers
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,
fish
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 and
chips
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, and
pizza
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 in British countries between 1970 and 1990.
Overall
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, over the 2-decade time period,
whereas
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 hamburger and
fish
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 and
chips
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 increased their popularity consistently, the consumption of
pizza
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 saw
steady
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a steady
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 decrement. In 1970,
pizza
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 was the most preferred fast food product among given meals by 300
gr
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. During
next
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the next
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 15 years, it lost 1 in third of its popularity. By 1990,
pizza
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 had
showed
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shown
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an unsignificand
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unsignificand
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significant
insignificant
 rise and reached just over 200
gr
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 of consumption.
In
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 the beginning of the whole period, even though
fish
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 and
chips
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was
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were
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 more desired
one
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apply
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, their levels were very close, which was around 70
gr
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. Both rose gradually next 10 years and almost doubled their consumption. These 2 fast food dishes had breaking points, which were 1980 for
fish
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 and
chips
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 and 1985 for
hamburger
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hamburgers
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. After these years, they had soared their fame and reached peaks of 500
gr
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 and just under 300
gr
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fish
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of fish
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 and
chips
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 and
pizza
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, respectively by the year
of
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apply
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1990.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, chips, pizza, gr with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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