The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park secondary school since it's construction in 1950. Summarise the information and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevent 1950 Main road Houses school Farmland playground 1980 Main road Car park science block school Sports field play ground 2010 Main road Car park science block school Sports field play ground

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The given maps illustrate changes that happened in the zone which was in the West Park secondary school in 3 various years( 1950, 1980, and 2010).

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, it was important that both vegetation areas and residential places were destroyed

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the population facilities which added to

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region.

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the graphs, the position of the School, which was next to the main road, was the same as the prior, but in 1980 and 2010 the main building was in

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place. Next to the institute were Houses in 1950;

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district was replaced by the car park and science block at other times. The pictures demonstrate the playground, which was behind the school, in both 1950 and 1980 was the same as each other, yet in 2010, it separated two sides namely, the playground and sports field.

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, in 1950 behind accommodation was farmland;

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in 1980 it was altered into a sports field;

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, the car park, which was next to the science block in 1980, has been developed;

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, it obtained a sports field for its improvement.

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