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The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table demonstrates the ratio of categorized destitute citizens of Australia in
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 1999.
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 the largest number of economically deprived people were couples with children, the least number of individuals who
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 from economic problems were elderly couples. In 1999, almost 2 million
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Australian
residences
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 by just above 10% and more than 1
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tenth
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 of
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the family
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family
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families
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 with kids, which is equal to 933.000 people had poverty
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 is the most crowded figure and it was followed by childless singles by nearly 360.000 citizens. When it comes to the biggest proportions, divorced parents were leading by just over 20
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percent
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, and singles who had no children were in second place by almost %20
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percent
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. The individuals who
less
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faced
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 problem relatively were aged Australians. Among elderly citizens, 4
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percent
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 of couples by just under 50.000 individuals and 6
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 of singles by well over 50.000 Australians had insufficient income.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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