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The graph shows the rates of participation in three different activities in a UK sports club between 1995 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the rates of participation in three different activities in a UK sports club between 1995 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided chart illustrates the participation rates of
the
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UK
sports
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club
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clubs
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, especially in three different
activities
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, including swimming,
team
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sports
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 and gym
activities
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 between 1995 and 2015.
Overall
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, with the exception of swimming, other
activities
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 showed an upward trend during the given period.
Firstly
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, in 2010, the percentage of participants who enrolled in
team
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sports
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 was the highest, exceeding 38%,
whereas
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 that of swimming was the lowest, at around 17%. Specifically, the number of club members who participated in
team
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sports
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 was more than double that of swimming.
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, it is notable that the proportion of gym
activities
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 exhibited the most stable change, with figures changing by less than 10%,
while
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 the participation rate
of
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 swimming experienced a dramatic decline, from 9% to 29% between 2000 and 2010. Another noteworthy point is that in 2015, approximately 29% of people engaged in gym
activities
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, placing it immediately behind
team
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sports
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sports, activities, team with synonyms.
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