The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course.The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course.The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts
illustrates
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the jobs
of
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graduates
did after
finished
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their study in Anthropology
in
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at
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the
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certain university
also
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and also
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the salaries of three types of employment
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for
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that
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all of the Anthropology
graduates
. It can be seen that more than
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half of
anthropologist
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are in
a
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full-time
work
after give years, and
the
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they could
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paid more in private companies than being
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a freelance consultant
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or employed by
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. Most of the
graduates
from one university worked
full-timely
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full-time
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of
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52%. Following the full-time
worker
is the part-time
worker
being 15%.
Surpringly
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Surprisingly
, the
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proportion
of
umemployment
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unemployment
is 12%
at
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the
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third place just after those
fll-time
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full-time
worker
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workers
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and part-time
worker
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workers
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. There are 5% of them keep studying and
work
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working
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at the same time, and there are 8% of them not
doing
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the
work
while
they
pursuing
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another degree. Unfortunately, we got
8
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an 8
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% loss of
tracktion
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traction
. As for the salary,
it is clear that
private companies pay their employees more than freelance consultants
got
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and the government
in
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the
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percentage of 5% in the top salary range and 20% more in the
sencond
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second
level. We can tell that
graduates
got
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paid about 100,000 if they
work
as freelance consultants and government sector at the
propotion
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proportion
of 40% and 50%. In conclusion, most graduate students
got
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a
work
after five years, and the salaries they
got
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get
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paid might be
more
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higher
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if they
work
in a private company.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, work, worker with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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