The chart below shows the percentage of men and women who did various leisure time activities in England in 2006.

The chart below shows the percentage of men and women who did various leisure time activities in England in 2006.
The graph illustrates the proportion of
men
and
women
who did different activities in their free
time
in England in 2006.
overall
, watching TV is the most popular activity out of all and the least is playing computer games.
Furthermore
, in shopping, there is a huge difference between the usage of genders.
To begin
with, watching TV is the most used by both
women
and
men
in their free
time
, with nearly 80%.
Moreover
,
women
played computer games almost half of the
men
and even combined of their
time
spent in the least compared to the others. In 2006,
men
did not go shopping in their leisure
time
.
Furthermore
, the internet used by
men
is double that of
women
like computer games. spending
time
with family, doing sports or exercise and reading have an average of 79, 77 and 75 per cent respectively. None of them exceeded 80 per cent in both
women
and
men
except when watching TV.
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