The graph compares employment rates in three sectors of the economy in the UK between 2000 and 2010.

The graph compares employment rates in three sectors of the economy in the UK between 2000 and 2010.
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The line chart compares the changes in employment
rates
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in the different sectors of the British economy in the space of a decade ( from 2000 to 2010).
Overall
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, self-employed and public sectors of the economy regarding employment
rates
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saw a slight growth
period
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as a whole
while
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the private sector declined sustainably during the
period
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. The
rates
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of private employment consisted of the highest point around 50 at the beginning of the
period
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. Following that despite being the highest, there was a significant decline
firstly
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to 30 in 2006 and
secondly
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to 20
at the end
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of the duration. The other two sectors, namely the public sector and self-employed were roughly 40 and 20 respectively at the initial time. The
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of self-employed remained unchanged until 2005 and
then
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took over from private work in 2009,
thereafter
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this
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figure reached 30.
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that,the
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of the services in public experienced a considerable rise just under 50 in the middle of the
period
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and just above 50 in 2010.
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